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Bionicle- N.O.- Mystery of the Toa Miro- Prologue by NickinAmerica Bionicle- N.O.- Mystery of the Toa Miro- Prologue by NickinAmerica
I've submitted this to the comics category because... Well, I just don't know where else to put this. :(

Chapter One >> nickinamerica.deviantart.com/a…

Bionicle- Nova Orbis gallery >> nickinamerica.deviantart.com/g…

Anyway... it isn't much, but hey, it's my first go at telling a story with this style.

Really, though... considering I can write an entire chapter in a day if I have the time for it, and it only took me, like, two and a half sheets of pager to tell what would've eaten up, like, 7 pages on an actual comic... I might be on to something, with this.

Anyway... I hope you enjoy this first taste of what's in store.

Feedback is appreciated.
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Mikkillerib Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Good so far. Its also a nice twist with having a fusion of a comic and a story.
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DARKIGNIKA Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
The story im still reading so far is awesome but what keeps getin me is the white bits and the gaps in the art the stick out soo much thats my only gripe hope its fixed in others found out from ttv
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:iconnickinamerica:
NickinAmerica Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2014
Sorry. That's just what happens when you use a pencil.
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DARKIGNIKA Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
ikr and r u still working on that story
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NickinAmerica Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2014
Yes. Just taking a break from it.
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:icondarkignika:
DARKIGNIKA Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Guna bing it at some point
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FlameWhirlwind176 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
nice Gali and Takanuva cameo, sneaky sneaky.

Im really liking Toa Piras, he seems like a cool guy
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PrehistoricEchoes Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm enjoying this so far. Onto the next chapter!
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burkeonthesly Featured By Owner May 1, 2014
I'll admit, I'm curious. You've got that writerly knack for ending each page with something that makes the reader crave the next.
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Orionide5 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
Nice! The story and art are great together.
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ArakalFlamescale Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014
Would like to read more of this XD
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Innodence Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
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MuddyKip64 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014
I already feel like this is a vast world.  Which I tend to like in the stories I read.  

I also like how this is half way between a comic and a book.  It just feels...right.  
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DarkSuperShadow64 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Student Digital Artist
This is looking great so far. You tend to be inconsistent with the spelling of Piras, though. One moment it's Pyras and the next it's Piras.

Aside from that, this is looking great. 
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NickinAmerica Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014
Woah, WHAT? Where is it spelled with a Y? I could swear I found them all...
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DarkSuperShadow64 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Just do a quick proof read. You'll find it.
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NickinAmerica Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014
I did proof read this... several times. Just finally found those (hopefully) last two instances and fixed them.
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DarkSuperShadow64 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Good for you.
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:iconlo-ruke:
Lo-Ruke Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
Oh this is going to be a treat
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Mace3739 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
Wow, I iz lovin' 'dis!
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Osmostrix Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
Lookin' good! I'm gonna enjoy this!Dance! 
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TheICombaticon Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, I'm most definitely hooked, now.


It's only the prologue, but this story already has a ton of intrigue to it, from the vagueness of Piras' special task, to why Vesta doesn't want him to do it (as well as the ominousness of the Po-matoran's carvings, unless those were just Easter Eggs; either way, nice touch with those!). Really looking forward to seeing where this goes!

...Also I liked the interaction between Banhi and Tiras. Good stuff. :) (Smile)  
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SchitzoTiger Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
...is that the carving tool from MNOG?
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:iconnickinamerica:
NickinAmerica Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
Eeehhh.... not canon-wise, but it is a reference (and a clue to the sculptor's identity), as are the three figurines he's sculpted so far.
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Innodence Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I think I have an Idea of who... him with his black mask that isn't the same color as his feet? possibly? not meaning to spoil it for anyone else?
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burnoutprime7 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
man, I like this toa. an awesome ride, friendly to all, I can only imagine how well we can fight.
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BulletBader Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
Mui Bueno! I can't wait to see the rest of this story when it comes out.

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dcaldwell101 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Student Artist
Cool prologue
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